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[Fic review & thoughts] Kpop & what was possible to fix in pc friendship.

Good afternoon, I created a new experimental format inside this stuffbook with opinions on fics read on this site and not only. The duration of this column will depend on you, but fertile ground for it in form of numerous read material is ready in advance. In this, shall we say, pilot I will outline an approximate plan of review and warn about it's possible rules and nuances:

1. Everything is subjective, your right to agree or dispute. I'm even in favour of sensible discussion on this theme, but keep in mind one truth - the thesis cannot be overturned by the antithesis, so don't even try to convince me otherwise. Only synthesis is possible from one or both sides, that is, the assimilation of elements from position of interlocutor.

2. If I miss something because of forgotten memories, inattentiveness or language barrier, feel free to point it out.

3. Don't hope for just one praise. Nothing is perfect. So no one can avoid pointing out disadvantages. But, in any case, if author really tried on fanfic, I will be polite and constructive.

4. However... If I find fanfic that I frankly don't like, I will be harsh, and yes, they exist. Sometimes I can reduce criticism to triggers and aggression, but...

5. Only fanfic and characters in it are affected, not author. Only the fiction abilities are evaluated, but not the personality. Getting personal is unacceptable.

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Our first review will be on oneshot «Kpop» by @T--D--O (pls help me to make links aaaa!!!), specifically Robert, from oneshots compilation «Among Us Logic - Broken Ships», which was previously owned by Pariso, who wrote there the first oneshot about PlayCheese and was taking requests. Actually, the material was requested, and was ordered by me personally, and apparently Robert was induced to write fic 'cause I ordered it, detailing everything from beginning to end.

Short retelling:
"Player invites Veteran to Mr Cheese's party, and the first accepts the invitation, what angers Captain greatly. There is a quarrel between PlayCap with mentioning important critical moments in their friendship. During it Cap calls Dum as ex and Player's real name, namely Jasper. It ends with Veteran, shooting Captain in head, and bad mood of opponents. Row between the two continues, and Cap tries to squeeze out apology from Player, but he's adamant. In the end, they both have a lot of emotions.

Then timeskip and party happened. Jasper sits sad with Vector aka Veteran, and Shem (Mr Cheese) with Ebenezer (Gentleman) looming in background. Vet tries to talk, but friend only snaps at him for it's him who wants PlayCap to broke up. There's fight again, but Mr.Cheese also beats fighters and kicks them out.

Veteran leaves silently, and Player... Goes slowly but surely to Caitan (Captain). Then he reaches Cap's home, contacts and reconciles with him very quickly, hugging at the end."

Fic did everything on technical level, and most of my requests were taken into account. But along with strict and clear follow-up, new mistakes and not so much exposed moments have been made.

The reason for quarrel is clear and valid. And it organically leads to all memories from the past of this restless couple. Although the fact that Player pitifully brushing aside and lying, as evidenced by hilarious "button" metaphor, not exactly what you'd expect him to do. It feels that he takes repressed position here, which, of course, demonstrates canonical, but at the same time exposes him exclusively as... Guilty, because it's absolutely no. The roles of right and wrong between PlayCap are clearly delineated, what isn't very good and what will be reflected even more clearly later in the ending.