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Starlight [IcecreamVanilla123]

OC belongs to IcecreamVanilla123.

OC's Name: Starlight

Past Names: Starkit, Starpaw.

Future Names: Shining Star

Reasoning: She immediately opened her eyes when she was born and somehow crept outside and stared at the stars, so her mother named her Starkit

Star typically isn't a prefix used in the canon Clans, though I can see the appeal of the name. I do wonder what StarClan thought of her being named Starkit, though. How did she immediately open her eyes when she was born? I feel like it would make more sense if Starlight's mother named her Starkit because she wanted to admire StarClan.

Gender: Female

Pronouns: She/Her

Age: 28 Moons

No comment.

Clan: Thunderclan

Rank: Queen; Normally Warrior

ThunderClan is alright.

Sexuality: Straight

Alright.

Description: Starlight is a lean she-cat, with midnight black coloured fluffy silky fur, and has white and silver tipped ears and tail, with crystal clear eyes, one emerald green, and the other sapphire blue, a long tail and long legs, and has a scar on one leg, from a dog, and has a shredded ear tip.

Starlight seems interesting based on her appearance, and it's good that you included physical flaws that can be seen from an event she experienced.

Personality: Sassy but sweet, she loves annoying her litter mates and mate. She's ferocious and brave, would bravely, (but stupidly) attack a fox alone when it tried to carry her kits away. But she can and will shred your ears if you try to attack her precious kits. But is very very grumpy when you wake her for a dawn patrol when she has a nice dream or when it is raining. When she was a kit and apprentice, she could never get out of trouble, one day nearly drowning, the next day trying to climb the tallest tree in the woods as a dare.

Starlight sounds like a very mischievous cat! It's good that she has such a connection and bond with her kits.

Likes: Catmint, roses, lilies, friends, family, clovers, stars, crescent moon, shiny stones and butterflies

She likes a lot of plants!

Dislikes: Storms, mud, strong winds, monsters, moonless nights.

Understandable.

Strengths: Confident, Agile, Hunting, gathering shiny stones and flowers.

Weaknesses: Sucks at swimming, does wrong things at the wrong time, fighting with brute force.

Alright, makes sense.

Fears: Family dying, Friends dying, someone stealing her collection of shiny stones.

She must really like her shiny stones, other than that, those are normal fears.

Family:

Kits - Cloverkit, Violetkit, Rosekit, Lionkit

Future kits - Stormkit, Moonkit, Leopardkit, Petalkit, Honeykit

Mates - Stormstar

Father - Bluefire

Mother - Roseapple

What does Starlight think of Bluefire and Roseapple? How did they treat her as a kit? What do they look like? Starlight also has a ton of kits, but I can understand why.

Mate: Stormstar, is a dark gray tom, powerful with broad shoulders. He can be a bit mean sometimes, but he loves his family and friends and would die ten times to save them.

How did Stormstar and Starlight become mates? What do they think of each other?

Kits: Starlight has way too many kits...... She currently has Lionkit, yellow tom with amber eyes

Violetkit, silver she-cat with blue eyes

Rosekit, rosy white she-cat with blue eyes

Cloverkit, brown and yellow she-cat with green eyes.

Future kits

Stormkit, grey tom with blue eyes(named after his father)

Leopardkit, dappled brown she-cat with amber eyes

Cloudkit, white tom with blue eyes

Moonkit, silver and white she-cat, with blue and green eyes

Honeykit, golden she-cat with green eyes

Petalkit, black she-cat with amber eyes

I haven't decided personalities yet, so far I have only decided their names and looks..

That's fine, and they're all really young anyway, so I suppose it shouldn't matter.

Mentor: Robinfeather, is a calm and decisive, and has a habit of stepping on her apprentice's tail to stop Starpaw from running off. She often bumps into Starpaw, because she has to chase Starpaw when she runs very fast then screeches to a stop when she sees something she likes, like a butterfly, and Robinfeather can't stop on time and bumps into her, she helps Starpaw when she needs, and has a great relationship with her

Robinfeather sounds like a nice mentor!

Apprentices: None

Other relationships: Appleshine

Her bestie, the exact opposite of Starlight, and is Starlight's emotional support toy, they do everything together, and they often get in trouble together and gangs up with her on her brother, Stormstar, they love teasing him, and once held a competition to see who could annoy him the most times in a moon.

Alright.

Backstory: As a kit, she always was in trouble, and often sneaked out of camp with Crystalkit, Applekit and Stormkit, nearly got carried away by an eagle and once she fell in a stream in which led to Roseapple having to run into Riverclan territory to get her back. She never got caught until she tried to get a tuft of fox fur to impress her mother. Then she and her crazy gang had to ran like cheetahs to get away from the foxes. From then on, Roseapple never lets her sneak out again.

Who is Crystalkit? What happened to them? Why are they never mentioned again?

Nothing big happened during apprenticeship, just like a normal apprentice, but when she was a warrior, she and her clan had to fight a gang of dogs and now she is a queen with Cloverkit, Lionkit, Rosekit, Violetkit, who will turn into Cloverleaf, Lionfur, Rosepetal, and Violetflower.

Those are pretty warrior names!

If she was a tribe cat, she would be Star Shine In Sky, and yes, I know if she is a leader she would be Starstar but I like it anyways.

Cool, cool.

Overall, Starlight is an okay character. You definitely need to explain more, like who Crystalkit is, and what her parents are like and what they look like. I don't really think Star would be used as a prefix by Clan cats, but she's your OC, so you can do what you'd like with her. She seems to really like shiny stones and gets distracted easily. A few things could be worked on here and there, but you don't have to listen to my advice. Starlight seems interesting, and if she's developed more, then I'd love to see her resubmitted once you make more about her, if you'd like to resubmit her eventually.