❝ ─── 𝐏𝐑𝐄𝐃𝐀𝐓𝐎𝐑 • 𝐑𝐞𝐯𝐢𝐞𝐰 𝐃𝐞𝐧 ⸝⸝ [CLOSED]

. ➤ ; the kingmaker . ⌗ .

✰❜ CUSTOMER ❱❱ YouCanCallMeCorn
✰❜ PREDATOR ❱❱ ceyshells

✗ 𝐅𝐢𝐫𝐬𝐭 𝐒𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭 [18/20]

⇘ Cover [9/10]

The cover is well designed and fits the theme of the story, however, the words on the cover could be a little clearer. Those which have the window as the background are slightly indistinguishable.

⇘ Title [4/5]

The title is very interesting and unique; it draws the reader's attention easily. Very short, concise and to the point.

⇘ Blurb [5/5]

Beautifully written. The header explains the storyline of the book and touches on the main characters without details. Following that, they are then distinguished in detail on their roles and developed based on their missions. I really enjoy reading blurbs that are long but share enough information about the story's main plot as it intrigues without sharing too much. Good work in this aspect.

✗ 𝐈𝐧𝐜𝐞𝐩𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧 [9/10]

This story had me hooked the instant I read the first chapter. It starts with Tetsuya witnessing the treatment of the new dancer by Haizaki, whose role isn't mentioned. He becomes intrigued by her, particularly due to her looking about his age and her skin colour. Additionally, it is also stated that her face reminded him of a god, which could represent his loyalty to his "religion". Following that, he takes over from Haizaki, and asks the girl to strip in a separate room away from his eyes. For me, this scene depicts how courteous Tetsuya is, and how he relates with other people's feelings despite how unfeeling he appears.

✗ 𝐏𝐥𝐨𝐭 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐈𝐝𝐞𝐚 [18/20]

Though this book uses characters from a manga, the story itself is no doubt the author's own creation. Personally, I'm a big fan of alternate universe stories, especially those that utilise aspects from an already known fandom and transforming it into a new concept. This story is definitely one of those, and it is well thought out.

The second chapter mentions the main plotline, not dragging out the introduction of the storyline. The story as an overall moves along at a smooth pace, following a step by step timeline that slowly inclines toward the action.

✗ 𝐂𝐡𝐚𝐫𝐚𝐜𝐭𝐞𝐫𝐬 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐄𝐦𝐨𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧𝐬 [12/15]

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heir emotions are mainly shown through actions and occasionally thoughts.

There are three main characters: Tetsuya, Akashi and Daiki. The reader is introduced to Tetsuya right away, as he is the one who handled the new dancer, mentioned in the title of the first chapter. Daiki is not introduced where I've read thus far, so I will elaborate on Tetsuya, Akashi and Tetsuya's brother, Shigehiro.

Tetsuya is mild-mannered, and his thoughts usually reflect this trait. However, when he sees fit, he does let loose and says things that he wishes he had not, shown in the scene shared with Akashi. Formal to the point that he vaguely comes across as robotic, following orders almost mindlessly, showing no emotion though he feels them. On the other hand, he's able to contrast this formality with a somewhat impudence when interacting with Shigehiro.

Akashi is a prince, and he certainly behaves like one with his authoritative behaviour and holier-than-thou attitude. Extremely comfortable giving people orders, he is also oblivious to the discomfort of others. His first appearance in the interaction with Tetsuya, to me, was like a game of chess, where they can clearly see all the pieces and movements, but at the same time, they have no idea what each other is thinking, trying to force answers out of each other.

Shigehiro is Tetsuya's brother, a cupbearer. He is, as stated in the first paragraph of his introduction, very pure of heart. However, he will not hesitate in making hasty decisions when those he cares about are involved. As brothers, Tetsuya and Shigehiro see through each other's thoughts easily, as seen when Shigehiro knew that Tetsuya was hiding details of his mission and when Tetsuya knew Shigehiro was deciding to go to the lake despite shivering. He feels like a person with influential and profound thoughts.

The main characters introduced so far are all very unique, harbouring distinct personalities that fit together like a puzzle to form a cohesive picture.

✗ 𝐖𝐫𝐢𝐭𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐒𝐭𝐲𝐥𝐞 [14/15]

The first point which I like: the story is written in third person, which gives the reader the opportunity to observe each scenario as opposed to a first person point of view where everything is seen from the character's perspective. Every scene in the story is written in great detail, providing elaboration on the characters, their surroundings and feelings in a way that makes the reader feel connected with the words.

✗ 𝐆𝐫𝐚𝐦𝐦𝐚𝐫 [19/20]

I

have nothing to pick on in this aspect. The story is well written with no grammatical errors, the vocabulary used is wide and does not give the reader opportunity to feel repetition. Docked a point as there are extremely minor issues that can be corrected by checking through.

𝐓𝐎𝐓𝐀𝐋 [90/100]

𝐏𝐑𝐄𝐃𝐀𝐓𝐎𝐑'𝐒 𝐍𝐎𝐓𝐄: Hello, I had a blast reading and reviewing your story. I got into manga recently, and reading your work makes me want to start reading this one as well. If you require any clarification, feel free to pm me!

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