If there is one thing that I 100% recommend for you to use for your lemons, no matter the kind of lemon, it is dialogue. Dialogue lengthens the story, has key details, and just makes everything feel more human, even if the characters aren't necessarily human. Take for example, these two scenes below:
He inserted his member into her entrance, gasping as he did but not saying a word, waiting for her nod of approval. Once it was given, he nodded back and started thrusting slowly inside of her, looking back up every few moments to check on how she was doing.
Even though this is a good lemon paragraph, it seems rushed and quiet, despite the lengthy details it seems like it should be longer somehow.
He inserted his member into her entrance with a gasp, looking up at her. "Are you ready, love?" He asked with a slight pant, losing his patience as she nodded, biting her bottom lip. "Yes...yes I am." She whimpered, letting out a soft moan as he started thrusting slowly inside of her.
Now for this paragraph, it includes dialogue, and is the same length as the last one, despite not including all of the information given.
Dialogue gives you wiggle room to write different facial expressions, as well as different tones of voice. Is the character desperate? Excited? Worried? Aroused? Scared? All of these different things can mean different tonal indicators, such as:
Whimpered
Panted
Groaned
Gasped
Moaned
Purred
Growled
Whispered
Breathed
Drawled
Mumbled
Muttered
etc.
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How to write lemons
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