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6|Letters Across The River

Author~> @Mochi711

Book~> Letters Across The River

Status~> Completed

~Cover 4/10

Starting with the cover, it's pretty average. I know we are not good designers but good writers still, I would like the cover to be attractive and not too plain. We do say that we shouldn't judge a book by its cover but on Wattpad, it's the complete opposite.

Hoseok's picture for the story was perfect but the title and the author's name could be written in heavier font for clarity. It would make the cover pretty and nice. Or you could ask a designer on Wattpad to make you a cover. There are talented designers on the app too.

~Title 10/10

In the start, I thought that it was related to Hoseok's house being on one side of the river and his best friend's (Essie's) on the other. It turned out that I was completely wrong here.

In the last chapter, the author beautifully portrays the meaning of the title. It conveyed about the river which separated life and death. (I am not sure if I'm right.) In conclusion, I have loved the title.

~Description 7/10

The description only consists of one line which is good for a short story. But it is not eye-catching which will want the reader to not open it in an instant. The full stop when the line finishes is missing. Please add the full stop.

Let me get it straight, the description was plain but perfect for the story. It only clicks when you read the story till the end. The author can consider rewriting it with more hints about the plot.

~First Impression 7 /10

The first chapter is one of the letters Hoseok has written. In the start, it seemed an average story in which the plot is portrayed in the form of letters. (Which is true.)

The letters were in informal language; to make them eye-catching, I suggest using headers and bolding some text at the start and end to make it aesthetically pleasing.

~Plot 15/15

I could not express how beautiful the plot is. For a reader to understand everything, one has to read it till the end. The last chapter was portrayed very well.

Tears welled up in my eyes and I couldn't bring myself to read it more. The emotions were so well written. I'd like to praise some of the lines, which I found, made the story come to life:

He felt it was unfair that the world got a rebirth in spring yet she was forever stuck in the cold winter of death.

He stepped off the train and into the cool spring air.

All around him, spring was starting yet his heart was still wrapped in the icy cold of winter.

The end chapter is what the whole story is about and I like how the author wrote it.

~Grammar and Punctuation 13/15

The punctuation in the letters which Hoseok wrote was nowhere to be seen. Letters are meant to be like that but I suggest the author add punctuation in the letters as well to make it appealing to the readers' eyes.

There was no other error I could point out in the story.

~Characters 10/10

Hoseok is shown as a cheery person at the start and one can feel it through the letters. Hoseok is a character who shows emotions and plays his part in the story well. In the last chapter, we also get a lot of hints about the character Essie who no longer is alive in the story, yet her whole personality shines through the chapter.

I would be lying if I said the characters in the story were not perfect. The chapters were written with the utmost care and emotions one could pour to make it life-like.

~Pacing 10/10

The pacing was perfect, there is no doubt that it was at its best. It was neither slow nor fast. The chapters flowed smoothly like water.

~Overview 9/10

I would like to mention once again that the story and the plot were some of the best. I can not stop appreciating how beautifully the emotions were written. Few authors can portray the emotions, and the author is blessed to have an art like that.

Just one thing I suggest the author is to make banners or headers to make the letters look attractive and eye-catching.

Total 85/100

Keep striving forward like this!