Petal Reviews [ CFCU ]

Unrequited Beginnings

Book by @Lanadelreygirlie

Cover 9/10
After looking at your character aesthetics, I can see that the upper picture is reminiscent of Maya. I don't really know completely how the middle and bottom relate to the story, but I think they fit the vibe of the upper.

Title 10/10
It really connects to the story, with Rohan and Maya's love being unrequited in the beginning. Short and sweet but with lots of meaning.

Characters 9/10
Your characters seemed fairly well developed, but at some points I found stuff out that I personally didn't think connected to their personality. Nothing against you, that might be my tired brain.

Plot/storyline 8/10
This is a fairly good plot I think for a realistic fiction. I don't read much realistic fiction/romance, so anything I'm saying may be completely unhelpful for your book. I feel like there's a few pacing stuff, like when we repeatedly hear Maya confess, then her friends tease her, repeat. There were some times when I went back to make sure I wasn't in the same chapter because wording for these scenes was really similar (Maya protesting Rohan has a girlfriend.)

Enjoyment 8/10
I don't normally read romance/realistic fiction, so this was new to me. I read 20/27 chapters I believe, and I enjoyed them. Personally, I felt the pacing was a bit weird/slower than I'd like, but that's more personal preference than anything.

Description 9/10
I love the way it's set up, and that you don't reveal too much but pull us in. My only suggestion is that you separate some of the paragraphs, particularly the last one, into 2-3 separate ones. There were no huge grammatical errors.

Overall 53/60
Honestly pretty good! Just some pacing stuff I didn't love, but you don't really need to pay attention/fix that, since it's probably just the nature of your story. I'm sorry it took me so long to complete!