Out of the Dark & Into the Light

Polls and opinions, and sample chapter.

So i've been thinking about changing the past chapter on when crystal's mother comes to ask for her help, and she see's her father again, and meeting her adopted siblings and the shapeshifters.

 I'm going to be honest i can't stand bella, Meyers has so money plot holes in her story its not believeable. Like alice and her visions, i believe alice sees what she wants to see when it comes to bella. I mean it's not like alice has actually practiced with her gift because if she did, her gift would have grown. Meyers places the blame soley on Jasper in book 2, when it's clearly not his fault. 

I don't understand how alice would agree to inviting a human into the fry when her mate clearly struggles around humans because of his empathy. I don't understand. And why are the actual adults in this book not being adults, why is edward making decisions when he's not the leader of the coven, why isn't charlie putting his foot down when he really needs too. It's like bella doesn't care about anyone but herself and it doesn't matter who gets hurt in the process as long as she has her immortal life. 

That's why i will make crystal the person who coming intot the scene guns blazing tell off every single person including jacob. She will not tell off Jasper, and Rosalie because they were the one's against bella knowing. And carlisle and Esme should have contacted crystal when she knew she was getting close to the truth so she could erase her memories. 

Below is a sample of how i will change, it's not fully put together. 

Chapter 3: The Reckoning at the Field

(Crystalline's POV: Forks, Present Day — integrated)

The clearing looked like a war room pretending to be a meadow. My parents near center; Rosalie and Emmett flanking; Alice wired tight; Edward a statue at Bella's shoulder—Bella, human, heartbeat loud in the open air—Jasper watching the treeline, coiled and quiet. Jacob paced at the fringe with wolves in the shadows. Maddie slid in at my side, Quinn (her bat) resting on her shoulder like punctuation.

I stopped beside Mom. "So this is the family."

The niceties died fast.

"You brought a human to a newborn strategy meet," I said flatly, eyes on Bella and the hand Edward had braced on her shoulder. "To this meet. And you didn't tell me until now."

Silence pinched. Edward inhaled to argue. I raised a hand.

"No. I get to finish one sentence without anyone lying to themselves. You all let this happen. Not just my parents—all of you. Edward, for dragging a mortal into a world she wasn't built for and calling it love. Bella, for treating everyone here like scaffolding for your wants. Alice, for curating visions like a scrapbook—seeing what you want, ignoring what we needed. Jacob—yes, you—because you posture about danger while letting the treaty hang by a thread."

Bella lifted her chin. "I'm not sorry. I chose this. I chose Edward."

"And the consequences?" I asked. "You chose those for everyone else. You're not his mate; you're his blood singer and a mystery he can't read. That's dopamine, not destiny. James hunted you because you stood in a room full of apex predators playing pretend. Don't rewrite cause and effect to flatter a romance."

I turned on my parents, fury banked but bright. "You kept me off every radar my whole life—erasing, hiding, cleaning—yet you didn't call me when a human crossed the line. You let it spiral into Victoria's newborn army. If the Volturi sniff this, it's not just your coven at risk. I am."

Esme flinched; Carlisle took the hit. Good. Truth first, comfort later.

I faced Alice. "Birthday party. Paper cut. You saw the cake, not the blood. Jasper got blamed for feeling a room's panic and scent like an empath is supposed to. That wasn't his failure. It was yours."