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Title: The Chains That Bind Us
Author: @Bre2k9
Genre: Modern KHS
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Synopsis
Chakra exists in our world - we just do not see it. Nevertheless, a battle occurs with it. This battle intertwines those who are part of it. It is their destiny to make sure that chakra is protected and those who do not know about it do not learn about it.
At least, that is what Nakamura Daisuke was always taught. He is chained to a destiny because of the power he inherited. But will a past meeting as well as a new mission at Konoha High School break the chains that hold not only him, but those who fight in the chakra war? Or will those who are chained crush those who have already broken free?
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Opinion:
Cover: The cover was absolutely fantastic! It really looked super professional, and I was impressed with it. Since it was the first thing I saw when I first came across the book, I have to say it was incredibly well done.
Rating: 5/5
Synopsis: What an amazing description! Go back and reread it, and really look at it. Do you see it? The author has created multiple layers, and it makes it fantastic! I love the secrecy and the general vagueness of it-it piques my curiosity and almost forces me to read it. It's kind of like when you meet a boy or girl and they are just so mysterious, they're an anomaly. Don't you get curious and want to solve that mystery? I don't know if that's just me or if lots of people feel like that. But this is kind of what the description feels like to me.
I also love how the author presented the OC-Nakamura Daisuke. She completely foreshadowed him and added so much mystery to it. It was an absolutely genius idea!
One thing I will comment on that can be improved-and I am being really nit-picky here, I feel like the description can be made more fluid. As I was reading it, some of the sentences were quite...cumbersome to read.
But overall, it was an excellent job.
Rating: 4/5
Chapters: One thing I'd like to comment on is the length of chapter 1. I felt it was a bit too long-on the app it appears as twenty two pages, which is a bit lengthy. Personally, I hardly noticed it but there are some people who do not possess enough of an attention span to read on end without a break (of chapters). If you maybe took a couple of pages off chapter one and put them in the next chapter, your story would appeal to a much bigger demographic. But other than that, the chapter(s) that have been posted so far are very well done in terms of length and word count.
Rating: 4/5
Grammar: Your grammar is exceptional. You have very good sentence structure and make good use of different dialogue tags. Your writing style is unique and I thoroughly enjoy it!
Rating: 5/5
