Chapter three the Battle 4 the caln
thx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! and stop flmaing the stroy!1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1 (English please)
StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos.(what am I? Chopped liver?)
"JazzPaw get up." She cried. JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr.(this part would be cute... But the spelling)
"Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked.(because 'to' is too mainstream)
"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp.(entrnse?)
But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11(what's with the ones)
"Shadowclan are attaking!" She yelled. All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat and clawd him and he ran of.(that was quick)
"Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. Your a good fihter!"
StarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant. (Keep dreaming)
thnkx and ples no more flams (flams?)
