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↦ -jissoo ⋆ Married to Park Jimin

-JISSOO
married to park jimin
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title: 2.5/5
↦ medyo mababa 'yung score ko dito kasi wala na masyadong impact 'yung title. kumbaga, mainstream na? because i've seen a lot like this na, kaya ang unang pumasok sa isip ko 'anong meron sa story na 'to na magiging kakaiba sa ibang story na ganito rin ang title?' so at first thought, hindi ko siya babasahin, pero it's very relevant to the story naman.

description/introduction: 6/10
↦ I gave you a fair score— not to high, but not to low either, it's because I admit, there was some hook in your intro, pero parang nakulangan lang ako? yeah, parang gano'n na nga.

dialogues: 2.5/5
↦ again, sorry for the score, I just noticed na in most— or all, I guess— of the dialouges were not in coordination with the emotion it tried to express. like for example, galit, pero hindi pinapakita no'ng dialouge, or vice versa, things like those. pati 'yung ano, pagnagtatanong na pagalit? (ex: bakit ba?!) yours is just 'bakit ba!' sorry for being a perfectionist or what, hehe my bad.

grammar and writing style: 15/20
↦ the grammar was fine, I guess. (I don't really know the correct grammar in tagalog sooo, yeah.) wala rin naman masyadong english, so your score in terms of grammar is quite okay. yet i'm not very fond of your writing style. there were numerous errors, typos and unnecessary mistakes. by editing this, your story would be alot better. mas enjoyable kasi ang story kung walang errors, kasi inaamin ko, hindi ako nagbabasa ng mga ganito kasi hindi ko talaga feel lol.

plot: 19/25
↦ for the plot, i'm sorry to say this but it was again, mainstream— and a but cliche like when step died at the end. I've seen stuff like these (yet I don't read them fully). there weren't unexpected nor marvelous plot twists, but there weren't plot holes either, so I might say my score for this is quite okay.

flow of the story: 13/15
↦ now this is where the scores go climbing up the empire state— the flow of the story was quite satisfying and as the story went on, it grew on me. so yes, the flow of the story was satisfactory and you did a great job!

personal enjoyment: 16.5/20
↦ my score in this was quite high as well, this is because of the flow of the story. although I admit that the story wasn't a page turner for me. pero still, na-enjoy ko naman while reading (specially jungkook's parts when he acts all knight in shining armor) so thumbs up for this!

additional: +2
↦ plus two because I actually quite enjoyed this story.

overall » 76.5/100
↦ sorry for the score hehe, I hoped I wasn't too much. anyway, I actually liked this story, take time to edit this and this story would even be greater. I might actually give this a 9liner!

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tinkeo: hi hehehe I actually read this while I was on my way home, thank you for giving me the chance to review your story, -jissoo! thumbs up and a good job in this story! your other story would be review after I review a different story from a different author because it was stated in the first part that I would do intervals between your stories mehehe. ps, hindi po ako ganito kasipag, sa una lang talaga ako mabilis, later on, matagal na ulit ako mag-rereview ehehehe.