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SBgirl04's "Naruto: Sound Sisters"

So, I have been putting off doing this review for quite some time. Why, you ask? No reason, none at all. When you have a terrible case of stage four Writer's Block along with what the doctor's are calling 'Terminal Procrastination,' it becomes difficult to stay consistent with writing. Anyways, here it is, the review I've been waiting for, as well as SBgirl04 I'm sure. Don't know about the rest of you out there, but all eyes are welcome to read what I have to say. Especially those that may want their own works reviewed by me, though I doubt I'll get around to it...heh.

A few things to clarify before we begin, so you can better understand how to interpret what I say in this review. SBgirl04 has stated this herself, and has even hinted to it in the title of her story if you happen to visit her work(s), that "N:SS" is Under Construction. What does that mean exactly? Who's to say, but I'm fairly certain she's simply editing and revising the first few chapters. She could be touching up the last few as well, but I am unsure about that. Simply take it into account that the author of this story has either felt they've improved or seen mistakes in their story that they are taking the time to edit it before adding any more to it. A very mature and even commendable thing to do here on Wattpad. Not many would do that here, not publicly anyways...

Along with this, a word of caution. I, personally, tend to avoid any sort of fanfiction that involves Naruto--for obvious reasons. The anime itself being used as a fanfiction is overdone, as much, if not more so, than that infamous Attack on Titan series. So because so many people are writing fanfiction for Naruto, it's damn-near impossible to sift through the shallow, poorly written, Mary-Sue-esque fanfics before finding one that is actually worth reading. And at that point, you're so exhausted from looking through hundreds of works that you've formed an automatic bias against Naruto fanfictions. I'll admit I am guilty of this; but I've tried setting that aside this once, as I have with AoT fanfictions (see previous review), to see what SBgirl04 has to offer. Essentially...she's become the ambassador for all Naruto fanfic writers here, and how I feel about her work will also be reflected on other fanfic writers for the anime. The future of my bias, or lack thereof, towards Naruto fanfics in dependent upon you, SBgirl04. No pressure.

Introduction:

---As the name suggests, this piece primarily revolves around two sisters: Imao and Imai (apologies if I misspelled their names), along with their father and brother as they become adjusted to their new life in Konoha (Village Hidden in the Leaves). Their decision to come to Konoha is rather unclear though; if that is due to me not having read all the way through SBgirl04's story, then I wouldn't tell you anyways, if it is for some reason that would be obvious if I had seen all of Naruto: Shippuden then my apologies. The story itself is set 'Post-Shippuden,' the author actually mentions in her brief, yet concise, summary: "About a year after the 4th ninja war..." Here is her full summary:

"About a year after the 4th ninja war, an unknown family settled down in the outskirts of the beautiful village of Konoha. Although they try to live a normal life, they soon encounter a secret that will devastate the wonderful friends they make along the way."

A tad short, but that could be a good thing. While I do believe it could be lengthened with greater detail. The tone of the summary suggests that the narrator is distanced from the characters in the story, and is instead an observer of all and not one. What I mean by that is that I wouldn't be surprised, based on this summary alone, to find the author using 3rd-Person perspective, and not ever write what any character is thinking. in addition, they may not even focus solely on the two sisters, but instead shift from character to character. This...is not the case, as SBgirl04 does seem to write what a character is thinking at times, as well as focus on the two sisters (they are the main characters, so no fault there) more than most. I believe that not only could/should the summary be extended, but revised to where the tone displays that the narrator and the audience will indeed come to know these characters on a personal level. This can be shown best by being more specific in description, rather than being intentionally vague about the characters and what may happen to them.