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Jerome's POV
Mitch and I were just reading a book...Just kidding, I don't know how to read. We were eating some cake, when it happened. We thought it was nothing at first, but it was a big deal. We saw two zombies at the bottom of our tree house.
We quickly took them out, and continued on with our lives. But soon more and more zombies arrived. There were millions, some with armor, some with weapons. We were surrounded. We were forced to leave our tree house. Now we are on the run. And here we are.
"Mitch, what do we do?" I asked a little scared
"I don't know biggums" He replied. We just kept on running and running. Then it happened. We turned a corner, and there they were. A bunch of zombies were in front of us. We turned around, but more zombies were there. We were trapped. I pulled out Betty, and Mitch pulled out Katniss. I swung my axe like a mad man, killing tons of zombies. Mitch was shooting rapid fire at all the zombies in range. But more and more kept on coming. We couldn't fight anymore. Then they arrived. A blonde haired man wearing a red shirt jump down in front of us. He was wielding an iron sword. Along with him was another man with black hair, and a blue shirt. He was wielding a diamond sword. They swung and swung. They were so fast, it was all a blur. Soon, they chopped through all the zombies.
"Hey mates, y'all looked like you needed help" said the mysterious blonde haired man
"Yeah, Lachlan's right. You guys okay" said the mysterious black haired man
"We're all good biggums. Thanks for the help. I'm Jerome and I'm a bacca" I said
"Nice to meet you" said Lachlan? I think that was his name.
"I'm Vikk." said the other dude.
"I'm Mitch" Mitch said smiling
"Thanks for the help, those zombies have been following us." I said smiling
"No problem. Do you want to join us? We were being chased to, but we lost all the zombies. Because we are awesome" said Vikk
"Sure" I said. We now have a decent sized group.
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