Raptor of the shadows

Chapter 1

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Dawn was pacing back and forth for she hated her pack for how many males wanted to mate with her, an idea came to mind that she should leave the pack. Dawn ran as far away as she could from her pack, she came to a river and stopped to drink from it when she saw a lone male who she knew would try to mate with her so she hissed a warning to stay away and so he did. Dawn continued on her way to find a new territory for herself, Dawn kept on traveling until she found a cave behind a waterfall. She decided to rest there the night. She layed down and as she went to fall asleep she heard voices, like the humans made but how did they find her? Did they track her using their pack? Dawn was not going to go back to the cage even if she had to kill. Dawn got ready invade of an attack when a human carrying an injured human walked in, this human was female and she was carrying a male with another male just outside, Dawn was confused at this so she stayed quiet.
"We need to rest here the night Harry," said the female.
"I will keep watch over night Rose," said the male by the name Harry. The female put the injured male on the ground and put a thing of moss over him, Dawn watched in amazement at this sight, she was sitting around when a rock landed on her tale making her hiss. Dawn saw the human male come in and seeing me he grabbed the female and the injured male and backed away, Dawn was confused.
"I am friend," said Dawn in raptor the only language she could speak. The humans were terrified at her red colour and orange feathers and by the fact she wasn't the alpha of them the male and female were due to the markings on their legs (anklets). Dawn bowed at them and kept her eyes low so they didn't hurt her, the female seemed to understand Dawn meant no harm and went towards her, she gave Dawn a pet on the head and noticed that Dawn was getting a bit fat. Dawn looked at herself and relished one of the males had mated with her properly, Dawn looked at the female and the female spoke in raptor.
"We friend and I have noticed you expect egg so is it ok if we join you and become part of your pack," said the female in raptor, the male looked confused because he didn't speak raptor.
"I know and yes you may join me and be part of my pack, I also see you have injured friend with you," Dawn said her feathers rising and she pointed to the injured man on the ground. The female looked at the injured male and shook her head.
"He won't make it but we want to bury him when he does leave us," said the female in raptor. We settled down for the night and the large male kept watch over us that night.
During the night.
I woke to a scream from the man so I went out of the sleeping place to see a group of large male raptors hissing and growling at him, I jumped in front of him and hissed at the males. The males were taken aback but seeing Dawn in egg they put their heads low and backed away slowly as to not cause Dawn to attack, she hissed one more time and they fled.
"Thank you girl I hope we can be friends but understand that Rose is my female ok," said the man. Dawn nodded and went back inside to sleep again.
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