As a reviewer, I have a target on my back. Not everyone takes well to our comments. It's understandable. Some people can't handle hearing anything bad about their Mary Sue. Criticism is hard to swallow, but some definitely do it better than others...
This was the first story I reviewed that got a reply. Needless to say I was pretty nervous about what was going to be said. I'm hoping these "journal" logs will improve our interactions with other authors. That or they'll make things worse. It's a fifty fifty shot at this point.
You can imagine my level of nervousness when I awoke to find a huge paragraph of text sitting under my latest Sue killing. I knew it was from the author and it probably wasn't going to be good. Eight in the morning and I was already stressed out. I dragged my laptop onto my bed and cautiously began to read.
Thank you for this....
1) Akane has not mastered her inherited Kekkei tota- never said she did.
2) if you have read the original sukier version it shows that Akane didn't master healing, but uses Mirais power. Also, I misphrased those sentences so her seeming like a Mary Sue is understandable. Akane borrows Mirais healing ability and chakra. I don't know why I messed that up so badly... I haven't explained anything.... So I guess misunderstandings are reasonable...
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3)commas....thank you for helping me realize this....
I come armed with websites. These are a few that have helped me more than you'd imagine:
Not the most exciting articles to read, but it gets the job done.
4) Akane has only met her grandfather a few times in her life, she lived in a completely different island. but that is to be explained in later chapters
5) she won't be living with Asuma and Kurenai, even Kurenai doesn't live with Asuma. Earlier in the chapter it says she will be staying with him for a few days until they sort out her living stuff
5)mirai.... Is to be explained in later chapters. Also why Akane doesn't resent Mirai will be explained later
6)resting thing... She's 10 and ran for hours as said..... Maybe you missed the prologue?
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