I don't care if you guys skip this note, that probably means you like the story but I want you guys to tell me if there is anything I can do to make this story better. I am still a rookie writer. I am trying to get a lot done in a short time because I am not using my device because I had to move to Louisiana and where I am there I don't have wifi so I use my grandpas iPhone so I need your commentary because you never know when I will be able to look at it again
