Well, not much of a reaction with chapter one, but I'm posting number 2 anyway. Something else that annoys me beyond all hell is the way some people end their books, sometimes with smut.
"A few thrusts later we both came."
NO
NO YOU FUCKING DID NOT.
SUCK THAT SHIT BACK UP INTO YOU. THAT IS NOT HOW YOU END SOMETHING. Do I need to give you a freaking example how to end your own smut scenes?
(SSOHD SMUTTY EXAMPLE COMING THROUGH)
"Seamus..." Aleks moans my name. "Im gonna."
"Do it. Come for me. Show me how much you loved this." I groan out, pushing deeper and deeper into him.
"F-Ffuck Seamus!" he yells, and his face is twisted into one of complete ecstasy and bliss. He releases onto my chest, and it drips down to his. And the look on his face, that I gave him, I made him feel like that, made me cum into him, making him moan softly one more time.
(ENDED SSOHD EXAMPLE)
Sure it's more work, but you'll fucking get my vote if you write something like that, and you'll probably get votes from other people too.
And not only ending scenes like that, ending chapters altogether. Its okay to have a thanks once in a while, but it's not okay to have, after every single chapter, Thanks for reading my book, I love you, you're so nice, thanks for the vote (insert username here) it's great to be doing what I love here on wattpad. Thanks again for reading my book!
No.
I will delete your book from my library.
And if you end chapters altogether like
"Ok I'm going to bed now." Aleks said to himself and went to bed. And then you get the novel of thanks, FUCKING NO. THERE IS A VERY UNHAPPY DUTCH GIRL SITTING AT HER COMPUTER RIGHT NOW.
It just. You can't. No.
