For this exercise, we were tasked with rereading the critiques given by our peers and choosing which suggestions we would make use of to benefit the revision of our piece. My main issue seemed to be problems with how I'd split the POV between characters. So that was where I tried to focus my efforts.
Based on specific advice I received I tried to lengthen the dialogue portions and make it clearer who was speaking so as not to confuse readers. I also tried to fix some places where I thought it was too wordy as well as giving it another check over for spelling and grammar issues. (Not promising there won't still be errors, there probably will but hopefully I fixed the important problems.)
All in all, even though I don't really like the way it turned out I think I fixed at least some part of the issues relating to POV. I don't know if I'll continue the story after the boot-camp. I don't even know if I'll leave this up on the site in it's current state when the boot-camp is completed. But I might want to look back on it someday. I don't know if I'll ever try writing in a split style again, probably not. I like the idea of it, I'm just not good enough as a writer to make it work. This seems to be a long running theme in my life, being really awful at whatever I'm doing when I try to broaden my skills of anything. Not that I ever expect to actually become a writer some day. It's one of my many pipedreams that never seem to go anywhere.
-FTTR
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FreedomToTheReaders' Exercises for Cat's Writing Bootcamp
RandomThis will be my area for completing and receiving feedback on the exercises Cat sets out for us to complete. I'd like to Catrina Burgess for putting together this boot camp, my goal is to use it to become a better writer overall for my own work and...
