~nefelibata {writing guide the 100/ random}

being descriptive

hey there i'm back

EMORI'S TATTOO HAS CHANGED LIKE TEN TIMES WHY IS NOBODY TALKING ABOUT THIS

anyways this chapter is on being descriptive!

here's our starter sentence: 

Murphy walked through the dessert. 
now that's a little boring. he's walking how? is it hot? let's add a little bit more, like how he's walking

Murphy dragged himself through the dessert. 
Okay not bad, but let's talk about what.

Murphy dragged himself through the rough sand. 
cool, so that's pretty good, but let's just make it a little better. 

Murphy dragged himself through the rough sand, the sun beat down on his neck.
That describes how it feels, but let's just go to tell how the sand feels. 

Murphy dragged himself through the sand that scratched against his ankles and the sun beat down on his neck. 
There we go! now you've been descriptive enough. 

here's a few notes on descriptions of character appearance: 

I'll use Raina for our subject. 

Raina had brown hair, with dark skin. She was shorter than me and had brown eyes. 
mkay that has like nothing for me. let's go more in depth with the hair. 

Raina had sunkissed brown ringlets. 
good, now we've described the hair enough that you can have a pretty good picture of it in your brain. Let's do her skin now. 

with golden brown freckled skin. 
okay so now we know she has freckles! let's now describe her height and eyes. 

She stood a few inches shorter than me, with mischievous chestnut eyes. 
now we know how her eyes look!

let's put that together: 

Raina had sunkissed brown ringlets with golden brown, freckled skin. She stood a few inches shorter than me, with mischievous chestnut eyes. 

Yaya!

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