Great job! You were very descriptive! The only thing I saw was a couple of grammar errors. You made a few compound sentences into simple. When you use and or but as a coordinating conjunction, you use a comma ahead of them. If you need any more information or help with that, just pm us and we'll talk more. When you use compound, complex, and compound-complex sentences, it makes the writer look smarter, and the reader will be more impressed! All around great job!
