Story: Life in Colour
Author: ddiaz80
Summary:
I write to escape, to express my emotion. To open up my bottle of feelings and pour it down the drain. These poems will be based on most colors of the color spectrum with my emotions; I will post these poems when I need to escape, so please bare with me on these updates.
Genre: Poetry/Random
Link: In comment section
What I loved: Blazing Fire! I truly love anger being expressed through the use of words; mostly because sometimes there is no other way to let it all gushing out! This poem was by far my favourite, there was some true raw emotion - I could definitely relate to how you were feeling. You described your emotions perfectly.. and I do love how you used orange instead of a violent red (blood) or black (death) when being angry! It shows creativity!
What I hated: A lot of the poems are sugary-sweet. Unfortunately for you, I'm the wrong person to talk about these kind of poems! Being a morbid cynic by nature, I far prefer the gloomy, miserable poetry! But that doesn't mean I hated these. To be honest, they were definitely readable [coming from me, that's saying a lot!]
The only problem I found was that sometimes it felt like you were using a word that didn't quite fit. I would suggest experimenting more with choices of words and not being so quick to use the first, second or third one that pops into your head.
Poetry is beautiful and a story of the soul; take your time with it and the right word will come along eventually!
Overall review: It needs a little more rounding, as it comes across as being quite rough at the moment - however it was enjoyable to read and there were some goodly describing words that made the imagery feel alive; as if the words were simply dancing off the page! Go through, have a read and make sure everything sounds good to go and nothing sounds out of place or awkward - go on... and be honest with yourself!
Overall score: 4/10
