JenKook Imagines

Writing style~

So i just want to ask u guys how should i write?

Cause usually my style is this 👇

Jiwon:Oh yea!I forgot my birthday is over!

Nagyung:Sure it is over.

I m not sure how u all wan me to write.I saw other books they dont do this though.

I m currently practicing the other style other author always use.👇

'Oh yea!I forgot my birthday is over!' Jiwon said.'Sure it is over' Nagyung replied.

So i decided to change my writing style to a better kind.I wrote many new stories here actually with my old writing style so i m not planning to change it to the new one.But right now i m writing a story named 'Grace'.Its like a series i guess.A few parts.
So guys i wan u to comment which style should i use?

The first one:My old writing style or the second one:The new writing style?