Hey guys! This is my first official story that I wrote. I originally did it as extra credit for school last year in 8th grade. I only had 2 evenings to write it otherwise it would be written a lot differently. I never really went back and edited it. I probably will eventually when I'm not so busy. If anybody has any advice for me to make this story better feel free to let me know and I'll edit your ideas in if I like them. Please vote and comment for me.
