Camp Buddy: Keitaro and Hiro, A Love Story

Edit and fix maybe

If this story gets to 500 views which o doubt I will edit stuff. I will put in Character arcs and backgrounds and expand all the characters which I didn't do looking back on it. The story went like this. ehhh then your dead your dead your dead your depressed emo ending. So yeah I will fix everything and add character development and maybe just maybe completely destroy the ending and keep on writing the story for a while longer. And if you're reading this after I have fixed everything which the story will probably never reach 500 views but if it does as ll you need to know is that it had no character development (I might of mentioned all the characters once.) The old ending (if I ever change it) included killing Hiro, Keitaro, and Hiro's mom whom I didn't even ever mention so you would only know her backstory if you watched the campbuddy walk through Hiro's route on youtube or played the full game and went down Hiro's route.

This story is so bad i need some feed back and ideas i want to fix it screw 500 views i want to make this story worth reading i need comments and suggestions

Update: At 300 reads unexpected thank you
Shall update now but what to fix so much to fix

Working on a new story check it out its called Sword Art Online: Trapped In Gun Gale Online it will be my primary focus. The storyline will be different dont worry im not copying. There will be original ideas and characters i dont want to copy anything. you should check it out its going to be the hardest and best thing i will ever write im pouring my heart and soul into. Plus a lot of time

Ending is being changed I will change the ending and keep on writing.
I said ummm 500 views. It's almost there what!