Dude, dude, dude for the love of all that is good and pure. PUt PaRAgrAPH BreAks! It kills me, it physically hurts me when I read a huge block of text with no breaks. It is an eye sore, and just plain cringe, but I can see how me ranting it not very helpful...
DO
YOU
SEE
WHAT
I'M
DOING
ARE YOU LOOKING WHEN I PUT PARAGRAPHS!!!!
Okay, read this random piece of text, ignore the writing, look at the stucture:
Through the trees she saw the shimmering, thin layer of ice on the river. If the little girl made it to the other side, she might be safe. She needs to swim in the river she's fetch water from countless times. Her muscles instantly stiffened when the brutal winter water engulfed her, but she continued to waddle through. Her breath was ripped from her, when she was pulled from the shallows, and into the rapid current. The rain and hail began to pelt down upon her, thunder boomed in the distant, and the night sky streaked with lightning. A malevolent feeling shivered down her and into the depths around her. Her exhausted clouded mind did not fully comprehend the phantom grip on her numb ankles. The hold Tightened, and the little girl couldn't breath when a unrelenting force sunk her to the bottom. In the sudden shock, she panicked and choked on the water. Her lungs burned as she rejected the liquid, and was left gaping in the darkness.
Cringy, I know. How about this one.
"Touch her, and you'll know exactly what's worse than death," He snarled under his breath, a fire sparking in his blue eyes.
"What are you going to do? Break out of your bindings and snap our necks?" The second teased, applying more pressure into the knife, slicing thin layers of skin.
"Don't tempt me," He growled through his clenched jaw. But his threat was ignored, and a punch landed in his gut; knocking the air out of his lungs.
Better, I know. However this one has dialogue which is a reasonable excuse, but you can see how it is more aesthetically pleasing to the eye. Also, it lifts the stress off the reader, for they are not reading a huge block of text.
You get where I'm coming from?
Here is a simplified list of when you should put paragraph breaks:
• A new character comes along
• A new event happens
• A new idea is introduced
• The setting changes
• A new person is speaking
• Time moves forward or back a lot
• The 'camera' moves
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