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Review #1

If you are graded with 85% or higher you will not be labeled as our 'Cliché' of the day. If you are lower that 84% then you are the 'Cliché' of the day.

This will be reviewed fairly and I already have the first review I will be doing. All rights were given to me when you messaged saying that I could review our story, don't take anything harshly or judge me or my book(s) according to your review. I apologize in advance if you think I'm being harsh, hut if I'm not and I hold back on my opinion my book won't be as good as it could be. I will not take down any of my reviews; all rights belong to me.

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STORY: 'Safe Little Thoughts to Keep You Safe.'

WRITTEN BY: @ofmiceandelle

It is an All Time Low Fanfiction

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What you (and Everyone else) will be rated on-

Cover- 5 points

Plot- 10 Points

Originality- 25 points

Humor- 10 points

Description- 10 points

Realistic- 5 points

65 points possible

Now this is what I look for in a story and this is everything you will be graded on. Good luck.

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Notes-

· Uses interesting word choice

· Popular girl (Carla) bullying 'weirdo'(Grace; Main Character)? Unoriginal

· Hot guy (Jake) goes for nerdy girl? Un realistic

· Hot guy doesn't want to sit next to annoying girl- funny

· Drug use- not usually used in ATL///original

· Ignores parents-unoriginal

· Cyber bullied// a little over used

· Hot guy goes out of his way to talk to nerdy girl(on social media) // unlikely

· Lucy hale as nerdy main character? She's too hot to be nerdy.

· Dad cheats on wife-original

· Have a secret (half)brother that you don't know about-somewhat original

Ok I understand I do this too, but please don't describe everything in too much detail, like the way you walk into school. Just say you walked into school.

· Alienated at school? Aren't we all?

· You acknowledge that the hot guy looking at you is cliché- good

Description on what it's about (not your description. How I would describe it/// so people who read my reviews know what I'm rating)-

Grace is a 17 year old girl in high school who is helplessly bullied by Carla the popular 'Queen B' of the school. Her life gets a little brighter when Jake the popular eye candy of the school notices her; however, her life goes back to being dark when she finds out her father cheated on her mom. Wait it's got an exciting twist, her new brother is Rian Dawson. What happens when she meets the whole band?

Your description (Review):

6.5

· bullied-unoriginal

· Life gets turned upside down- interesting enough to read and find out

Have more description please.

Cover- 4.5// better than I could do

Plot-

7.5

Most of the time Grace (Main Character) is either at school or at home, I wish she went to more places to make it interesting.

Originality-

20 points

In any ways it was like other fan-fictions

· Just up and leaves her family

· Dates a popular guy but a band member is in love with her

· They (Main character and Band member) won't admit their feelings

It's pretty typical but at moments can be cute and quirky.

Humor-

6.5

It wasn't necessarily meant to be humorous so that's ok, remember that I believe everyone needs a good laugh once and awhile.

I did laugh when Jake didn't want to sit next to Candy (another popular girl) because she was annoying and only talked about herself.

Realistic-

3.5

The book was interesting and I did enjoy some of it. You have to remember that she is 17 so it is unlikely that she and Alex would just be together; but since this is fan-fiction I'll let it slide. Also, in chapter 3 she just left her family, I do believe in real life there would be more to it than that.

Over All-

48.5/65 - 75%

You are our cliché of the day.

I did enjoy it and I thank you so much for being the first person I review. I hope you did enjoy my review and I do enjoy your writing and intend on reading some of your other stories. Thank you again so much.

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