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Review #2

If you are graded with 85% or higher you will not be labeled as our 'Cliché' of the day. If you are lower that 84% then you are the 'Cliché' of the day.

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Title:

'Good Girls Are Just bad Girls That Haven't bee caught'

Written by:

coolestduckever

It is a 5 seconds of summer Fanfiction//which I will remind you I don't usually do but this one was amazing.

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What you (and Everyone else) will be rated on-

Cover- 5 points

Plot- 10 Points

Originality- 25 points

Humor- 10 points

Description- 10 points

Also I will take of some points for whatever I find too cliché

65 points possible

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Now this is what I look for in a story and this is everything you will be graded on. Good luck.

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Notes

Jasey- main character

Luke- second main character, in the band 5 seconds of summer. +extra band members// +supporting side characters(moms, dads)

(Could I connect with the character?)

Mom yells at daughter for being friends with Luke since she 'technically' hasn't met him////doesn't trust her now-seriously like my mother. I understand how she's feeling.

She feels like her high grades make other parents put their kids down for their grades not being as good as hers/// connection, my mother always compares me to my other friend for not being in all advanced classes

Thank you so much for not making the dad the 'villain'

It's not nessisarly 'cliché' but I don't believe that people would just give up without getting there money back for the 'smart camp'.

She seems to give people the cold shoulder a lot, and I understand it with her mom and I think I also would feel bad if the guy that took my virginity, left, and never called(Alex). But I get annoyed when reading stories if there always unforgiving and whiny.

At the end of the chapter 'I wish it was my home Jasey and Luke share a romantic kiss were he looking into her eyes and tell her she's perfect which she then says "so are you." Now as cute as this is///cliche because it's what I like to call the 'Disney' kiss, the ones where they look into each others eyes and you can totally tell what's going to happen.

Then 3 or 2 of the last paragraphs in 'I wish it was my home' jasey and Luke get in a pillow fight///cliché because all stories start with a way for the two main characters to kiss. wether it's with baking, a pillow fight,or competitive games.

Luke and jasey share a heated kiss in the pool. Which she then feels sparks which is somewhat cliche because I the whole 'sparks through my body' thing isn't anything we all haven't heard before, but it's not nessisarily something you can leave out either.

Luke stole Jasey's clothes from the side of the pool/// pretty cliché I kind of expected that one.

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Description-

10 points

Long, descriptive, interesting.

-spends an entire summer in Australia? Tell me more///makes me want to read.

Internet friendship////we all have one, however intriguing.

Parents possibly finding out?//wondering how it goes.

Teenage romance?? I Love romance so this better be good.

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Cover- 5// not boring **high five**

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Plot- 10

starts off at home.

Where then jasey fools her parents into thinking she going to a camp for really smart kids in Australia, then doesn't go and stays with Luke.

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Originality-

25 points

I have actually, and I proudly say this, have never read a fan-fiction like this. The way you thought this all out. I love the way Jasey didn't just 'leave' her family for the summer. She actually (basically the story//your idea) came up (with Luke) the idea to make a fake summer camp for her to go to. And I usually hate fanfiction but this deserves a freakin award. Like ligit, it is my favorite fan-fiction so far and I'm happy you brought it to my attention.

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Humor-

10 points

"I threw at her, oddly with my teenage sass."- made me smile.

"'Look everyone, here's my daughter, she totally normal and doesn't listen to screaming music on full blast just to piss me off. See how sweet she is?'"- fell out of my seat laughing at the comparison between this characters mother and my own.(also known as making a connection, which is good for the reader I understand how the character feels)

I laughed when both of the moms at the banquette yelled at jasey and john(a boy there) for making out I'm the coat room. I bet he was a VERY good friend. (Joke from the story//for people who read my reviews)

When the whole family was eating diner for the first time with jasey, I laughed when jasey said she hadn't seen much of Australia yet and Lukes dad walked in and said "she was to busy getting it on with our son." And the mom said "oh, do tell."

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Over all:

Honestly I really enjoyed it, and that's saying a lot considering I REALLY don't like fan-fiction. I loved the way you thought of a plan so Jasey could go to Australia, I love the way Luke acts towards Jasey. I enjoy the cute playful little quirks you throw out in the book, all from like playing 'jokes' on Jasey and the funny things Jasey said to her mother, it also was really hard for me to find clichés within this story.Also, to anyone who reads my review please go read this, I really I enjoyed it an will be keeping it in my library until my next update.

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65/65 points

-5 cliché points (in notes)

60/65 = 92%

Sadly for me, not you, you are not our 'cliché' of the day.

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Thanks again.

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