GCSE DESCRIPTIVE WRITING

Sunset with them

        Original question:  Describe a spectacular sunset with your friends and family. Describe what you see and hear as well as your thoughts and feeling as you watch. 

     I was a thousand feet above the ground, but i could careless. It felt the rightful moment to         rejuvenate myself. Staring at the exotic view in front of me, I felt myself drowning into a   hypnotic trance. The bright sun rays were shimmering on the soil beneath my feet, turning it  into sparkling tiny jewels. A surface of vague clouds wavered up the sky, as the majestic sun     ventured it. A pleasant sensation washed over me, as the cool breeze flowed through me. The   sky was looking absolutely marvelous, as the sun shone like a goblet of fire, almost like a     painting canvas. 

        Breathing sharply, I felt myself pulled out from my trance. My siblings, who were as flustered    as me gasped at the astonishing sight in front of them. Suddenly, my older brother, Khalil,   approached my siblings, who were oblivious to their surroundings. Gazing at the malicious  smirk on his face and the mischievous glint in his eyes, I sensed there was something evil cooking   in his mind. But before anyone could react, the sight of my sibling drenched in cold water  greeted me. Bewildered, they were fuming with anger, all the whilst shooting daggers at Khalil,     who passed them an innocent look. I tried to suppress my laughter, and it disappeared as soon     as I found the squinting their eyes at me accusingly. 

      Realization dawned on me, as I saw the water gun laying on my lap. That manipulative devil!     shot me a triumphant smile. But i felt myself grinning, after witnessing my siblings laugh after       such a long time. I ran putting my hands up in surrender, as I heard the high- pitched voice of     my sister, blazing with anger. After a long water fight, we sat down and sipped on our refreshing    peach smoothies. 

     By now, the sun had began to set down, delighting the sky with its presence. I moaned, as the    fruity, juicy contents of the smoothie came in contact with my mouth. The soft humming of   birds, the light breeze and the exotic sunset were all making it an irresistible drug for me. A drug that was soothing my senses heavenly. The melodious sound of the birds were creating a     pleasant harmony against my ears. Inhaling the fresh air, I felt all of my worries floating into the thin air - leaving me lighthearted. The sky which was illuminating now with vibrant specks of   sun  rays shooting through the bluish- pink sky, which was as expressive as the painting of . There was a looming silhouette of large buildings at a distance. It indeed was a sight for sour       eyes! 

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