Blue Star Icy Award 2019- 20 [Closed]

L-3:- Critique (Judging- Cinderella)

14 DAYS

1. Style : 17/20

2. Characterization: 09/10

3. Creativity : 17/20

4. Structure : 08/10

5. Emotions : 9.5/10

6. Grammar : 18.5/20

7. Title : 08/10

√ Total Marks : 87/100

Review : The title is short, simple, straight forward and fits into the story perfectly. Even though your story plot wasn't something new or unique yet I love the way you had structured the whole story.

The ideas Chance used to give Blue ten reasons to live were common but it's shows simplicity of the story. And I loved it.

You have a good grip on description, which is why the story was so fabulous and read worthy. Specifically in the first chapter, the way described the emotions of Blue,anybody could feel the pain of Blue.

I loved the way you portrayed Chance and Blue's character. Chance is funny and sweet guy while Blue is somewhat closed off. The growth of Blue character was slow and steady. If you had rushed anywhere, then it could break the whole consistency of story.

I don't think there's no need of talking about grammar. The marks says it all. Overall, I enjoyed reading the book.

- the things you need to work on ;

- description/ blurb

I was totally disappointed when I saw your book blurb. Blurb is an important part of book. A blurb gives reader's an insight of the story and also instigate them to read further. So, my suggestion would be to work on your blurb.

-cover

A simple cover, I loved the first cover you have used. You can say it attracted me a lot towards the book. But I didn't felt same about the recent covers. It's totally up to if you want to change cover or not. But I would suggest you to change.

Well, a must read story. So, yeah thank you for choosing me as your judge and giving me chance to read the story. I hope the review helps.

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AFTER I FALL

1. Style : 18/20

2. Characterization: 08/10

3. Creativity : 17/20

4. Structure : 08/10

5. Emotions : 09/10

6. Grammar : 18/20

7. Title : 9/10

√ Total Marks : 87/100

Review : 'After I fall' when I had read the title for the first time, I felt it's too common and simple. But as I started to read the story, I realized there couldn't be better title for this story.