Blue Star Icy Award 2019- 20 [Closed]

L-3:- Critique (Judging- Rapunzel)

Ek Adhuri Daastan by Sparkly_penned

Style: 13.9/20

Characterization: 7.5/10

Emotions- 7.5/10

Creativity- 12.5/20

Structure- 7.9/10

Grammar- 13.8/20

Title- 6.8/10

Total:- 70.6/100

Filled with just appropriate amount of mysteries, I love how the story took off. The suspense just kept increasing, building the interest of the readers. So, basically I loved how you kept the readers hooked to the story from the very beginning.

But there were few disappointing errors also present, that were hard to neglect.

One; the characters were not explored to their limits. I understand that Swara's character is a mysterious one and will be explored in the coming chapters but even Sanskaar's character was not given much importance. All along the four chapters, I just came to know that Sanskaar is a famous, 'Architect', and nothing else was described.

So, you need to get a firm grip on the descriptions and character development. Take it slow and continue exploring the characters as the story moves forward.

Two, the story lacks creativity. An abandoned mansion, a locked room and a ghost girl/boy or a ghostly vibes from a girl/boy is everything that needs to kick start a horror story.

So yes, there were many things that needed to be changed or maybe some unique things needed to be added.

You need to pay a lot more attention to the grammar aspect as well. All throughout the story the tenses were not placed correctly. You kept on changing the tenses. If one sentence will be in the past, then the bottom sentence will be in present and then again in past... and this mistake kept on repeating.

In short, high amount of editing is needed.

But if I have to describe this book in single word, I'd say it is a captivating story.

Since the beginning it had me hooked badly and I enjoyed reading every bit of it.

Eagerly waiting for the further chapters to unleash!

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Forbidden Crush by thatabayagirl

Style: 13.5/20

Characterization: 4/10

Structure: 5/10

Emotions: 5/10

Grammar:15 /20

Creativity: 12.5/20

Title: 8/10

Total:- 63/100