The Synopsis is definitely intriguing and would leave the reader curious. Which is great!
*The Cover*
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The cover's nice. It's not very attractive - in the sense that if a reader searches for maybe "bad boy" and sees a number of books, it might not be the first book the reader would choose - I wouldn't say it's as creative as it could be, but it's still pretty cute. Its got a girl with a laptop, who I would only imagine is googling "how not to fall for the bad boy" and came across the book lol. And then the bad boy is there...being bad...in all his bad glory😂 (I'm sorry if I sound mean, I like it) but the important part is it represents the title, and draws a reader. Which is everything a great cover should have. So yeah, I'd give the cover a 7 out of ten. 😊
*Chapter One*
Chapter one was nice. Love the title "There's a reason he's everybody's ex" 😂 I won't lie I was reluctant to read the book, but when I read the title, I became intrigued. So yay you! It was short, but I think you indicated somewhere that you have short chapters ... there's nothing wrong with short chapters...I - as a person - just prefer em longer😗. There was really nothing wrong with the chapter ...apart from the spelling errors. I know you prolly haven't edited....You could indicate that the chapter is unedited..and then, it being a completed book, you can start editing or get someone to do it for you. So you don't loose future readers. Oh and one more thing... When Otto and Raine started talking, I was kinda confused cause I was like 'who tf are these dudes😅' But Naomi mentioned that Otto was her best friend... She didn't say anything about Raine being her best friend tho. So, my point is, it would've been nice if Naomi gave a short background story on them. Like "Raine, though we don't have a lot in common, is my best friend, asides Otto. She loves fashion blah blah.. She's popular blah.. She's more girly than I am but we still get along..." - ...and..you can add some more stuff or end it here. So yeah. It was a good start to the book.
*Chapter Two* I'd say chapter two was good. The spelling errors were less, and most of the sentences were well constructed. But the title of the chapter made me realize something. I'm sorry, but they don't talk like their age. I think they're either 17 or 18. But they talk like 27 or 28 or even 8 or 7💀
Sentences like "I am not going to go to school today" makes them sound either really young or really old.
How bout something like "I'm not gonna go to school today"
Feel me, yea?
It's just a suggestion, you don't have to adjust to it.
And I think that's about it for chapter two.
*Chapter Three* This chapter was also good. It was progessive, like the last one too. But I'd like to talk about character development. I think you did a great job here actually! Naomi, the lead is supposed to be an average smart pretty girl who isn't overly popular but is kinda known.
Otto, her male best friend, is a quirky nerdy cute geek who is clueless on being a proper teenager 😂 he's my fav character actually. He obviously liked Naomi and everyone knew it, ofc, apart from Naomi.
Raine, now I didn't really get her. I get, she's Naomi's female best friend who is "better looking" and popular and "cooler" than she is. But to me- it seemed like, they weren't besties, they were just classmates that were friends or sumn. My bad or your bad, irdk.
Zander, the bad boy who you shouldn't fall for. (cause in other books, the babes always fall for them 😂) he's so hateable, he's perfect! He's perfect in the sense that, you hate him but you still low-key ship him with Naomi😂
That's about all the main characters.
*Positives * ~Character development ~The fact that it's completed ~The synopsis ~The cover ~The character namess ~Story plot
*Negatives * ~The spelling errors ~Sentence construction ~Short chapters ~Not very thorough background info on all the main characters
*Overall* Overall, I'd say this book is one of the awesome books some readers ignore cause it's not very popular. It's a twist on a cliche, which is very interesting. I'd prolly read it again, when or if you make changes😗
So, A guide to not falling for the bad boy, deserves, three orange hearts and half... 🧡🧡🧡🍭
P. S, '🍭' means '.5'
Thank you, for letting me do this!🧡
Aaaand I'm gonna add your book to a new reading list I'd call "Mik Pik's" for the publicity I promised!🧡
