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Constantly these doubts keep
burning up on me.
I tried to supress it, but it needs
Some release.
For if there is no escape its his
garden.
Its different than the garden
of Adam & Eve
No notes, tell me why
is it so different this time?
Eventhough i told you, you would
Need to recommunicate it.

Honestly i dont know What's real
Anymore.
& i dont know if i can keep this longer,
For everytime i put out the fire it boosts
Up the flame.
And im sitting through the red lights

Might bow to you in dissension,
Might ascend into a new dimension,
For the Obvious thing to say was that
I wish you would hear my thunder before striking me with your lightning...

I tried to believe them, lost all hope.
But it's too late now, for the time is
Running out and i just saw the other
Side, so i know its coming now.

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