Okay, I'm gonna say it.
Stop. Saying. Orbs. Stop it with the overly complicated descriptions. (Okay but I thought you said to describe!)No. This is the wrong way. I know sometimes we feel as though saying eyes 400 times is boring and simple. However, for the sake of my sanity please, please just say eyes. There's so many other things you can change in the sentence other than eyes.
Simplicity is sometimes the best route. This goes for many other common words too.
Ex. Her brown orbs with flecks of gold bored into mine.
This is boring. And if someone was staring into my orbs with their brown orbs, that had flecks of gold, this isn't how I would describe them. All I got from this is her eyes are brown.
It's not realistically my thought process. I'm going to be realizing their intensity, or how their emotions come across. Give your reader more important information that is pertinent to the story, while describing. This also helps set a mood. If your main focus is to describe, you're losing the extra little bit of plot you could be giving your reader at this time.
Ex. Her eyes burned in the low-lit room, unmoving and hostile as she glared at me.
This gives me more than oh his eyes are brown btw. Plus sometimes you should let your reader imagine what these eyes look like. This also give me a mood or atmosphere.
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