@Mogitin I appreciate the feedback. Personally.. i think exposition dumping on a reader about who a character is, and how they act is a personally unengaging way to tell a story or tell the reader who the character is or what they are all about.
For Violet Eclipse, i've been working deeply on a show don't tell form of writing where you can gain an understanding of who Jorde, Donny, or Harvey is, by picking up on how they speak, their mannerisms and more through my own forms of subtle detail. Though I can understand where your coming from with the beginning the school bomber arc, not really going into deep detail about about the characters themselves. I did this on purpose pace the story better. Giving the reader the ability to imagine themselves what the characters might look like as they read through the story, giving them at most, how they talk as a foundation for how the character acts moving forward. In the arc I am releasing in January 2025.. i'll be more closely detailing my characters and describing more about them. But for now I think the pacing of the first arc is fine and integral to keeping reader retention.
Thank you for your feedback. And thank you for reading
