I’ve been reading your story and the suspense and descriptive voice are very compelling. I see a huge opportunity to elevate the pacing, tighten action scenes, and deepen Gwen’s emotional journey especially in high tension moments like the abduction and hospital scenes.
I can help by giving structural feedback, enhancing suspense, polishing dialogue, and even modeling a few key scenes to show how emotional and romantic tension could be layered alongside the thriller elements.
This would help keep readers invested and increase the story’s engagement from start to finish.
If you’re interested, I can start with a sample scene rewrite or a detailed set of notes.
