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I know it's kinda courtesy to not give feedback in comments, but when I ask for you to critique and tell me what you don't like I MEAN IT! I wanna know.
"it's not that serious, it's fanfic" I like to put in like 120% effort, burn out, and then come back a month later to repeat the process. Tell me anything: the pacing is bad, the dialogue is flat, I'm using the wrong words, that's not what that kind of tea does. I want to go back and read my shit thinking I'm the next Stephen King.