Being completely honest “His beautiful obsession” Is good but there are a couple of things that I don’t like about it,
1) all the dialogue is in one paragraph. Its one times hard to keep track where I am.
2) the use of words; is it hard to use “stupid” instead of “Baka” ? It’s one thing that really made me think about dropping the book.
3) character dialogue, when using quotations I think it’s better to make a new line for them, that way it would be better to know who is talking or not.
4) when are you going to update? I’ll be waiting for the next chapters