Hi so with your Ai story. I think you really should work on your grammar, punctuation, spelling and formatting because everything is very inconsistent. The plot for the first chapter is fine since it’s just building up the main characters and their motives in a way.
Like Ai wanting to spend more time doing childish things instead of facing all the pressure is on her as princess and future queen. The other one being the plot and mystery of what is the curse or what if the curse happens again with Ai that was so tragic according to Ai mother. Just structurally you need to work on this first chapter more as well because to me this feels like a first draft. Last thing I’ll mention is if this is gonna be a book don’t write it like a movie script. It’s very jarring and ruins the pacing and makes it hard to identify what perspective we’re following.
