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Hey babed I read your first chapter! Okay, so far I would like to day thst it was confusing to fully understand the context (which is okay) everything made partially sense once I started reading along, so what you could do is probably  start the chapter without Nico immediately seeing his sister. Try having him in a sort of 'mood'-ish setting to start it off, then give a few context paragraphs explaining whom hss living with and the relationships he feels for the characters (specifically Annabeth & Percy, since he nearly called her 'mom') to make the resder better understand why he almost slipped up. Because once it switched up from Bianca to Percebeth it kinda caught me off guard and told myself "oh, hes living with them?" Yk? Hope this helps for the first chapter! I'll read more, lemme know if you need any other help! :)

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