EPIC GIRL

hi, would you mind checking out my story. Maybe critic it a bit and suggest ways to improve it? Sorry I sound so demanding. hahaha. but i'd really appreciate it if you do.
          
           is about a young rich boy who fights his attraction towards a bratty mean girl.
          
          Also, you could suggest some of your stories to me in exchange.
          
          thanks!!
           https://my.w.tt/UiNb/UbMscjHNLH