SEViolet

I have to say, I like the vivid way you use words. The chapters that I read were told beautifully....however (I know, sorry), to me, the telling is very introspective and somewhat lacks the needed conversation and outward action that directly involves the readers with the characters and story. Let me say, I have no idea if this style is your intention or not. As I stated first, it is elegantly expressed, and I wish you great success and inspiration. You are off to wonderful start
          ~Sara

davpol8112

@SEViolet Yes - you're exactly right and I have been adding bits of conversation and description so its less like history and more like a story. Thanks so much for the constructive comment. Much appreciated. (Although not  much conversation is the sack of Jerusalem later on. Give my 'Metamorphoses of Titus' a go. Its more poetic. Would love to know what you think.
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