Lāsma

@snowyroads First chapter of "Crumble" is quite good, but there are too many things happening at the same time. If you could try and not grasp around, as it can become very confusing. Let chapter become longer by just telling about this particular family, or main character. I imagine you have so many ideas flying around in your head and you want to put all of them out at once, which after some time will make no sense to yourself or anyone else. Make each chapter only about one or two things, and divide them with some sort of chapter divide like "***" like in books. I hope this is not taken badly