metorokignto145678

Futuros proyectos
          	- una nueva historia de KNT
          	- La continuación de la historia "el hijo" 
          	- una nueva historia de ratatatat74
          	- una de MHA en donde habrá celos y obsesión
          	- una nueva sección en donde publicaré mis dibujos, todo relacionado a ratatatat74

48angel105

@ metorokignto145678  oye puede hacer una de: Contrato, Reverse y Motherly, del artista Laliberte
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metorokignto145678

@ metorokignto145678  im considering it
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Red_Crayfish100

@metorokignto145678 Did you accept reverse NTR and Netori? The former is the traitor is male going after another girl while the latter it is MMC stealing another.
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Red_Crayfish100

‎Hello. Want to give some constructive criticism.
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          ‎Read your reverse NTR fic one. However, find plenty of flaws here. 
          ‎- The female is depicted as a brute musclehead, which is very departure of the usual female antagonist.
          ‎- The main female (Himari) is too weak. How is she easily defeated against some brainless brute despite her long experience in martial art? 
          ‎- And the boy, sadly, he's too weak, even weaker than a twig and no confidence and strength whatsoever. Tbh, I really hated that trait.
          ‎
          ‎My suggestion: 
          ‎- Change the antagonist from musclehead girl into an alluring, yet manipulative slender female (reverse NTR rely more on clever manipulation). 
          ‎- In fight, Himari girl should be last more since she's more skilled and experience.
          ‎- Make Ren more comfortable and sociable, albeit a bit indecisive and somehow easily swayed in love.
          ‎
          ‎Anyway, that's all. Hope there will be change and fix to match usual reverse NTR plot and characters.

Red_Crayfish100

Also, had some gripes in your BEP fic.
          
          Why our boy Lihan must faced endless humiliation and betrayal, rather than giving him a space to breath and thrive?
          
          Also, why all of the girls must betray him and none of them sided with him? I mean, like the three of them decline to drop sentence on Lihan until council pushed them. Basically their betrayal out of hesitation, not pure malice.
          
          Honestly, pretty tired to see one NTR MMC 'programmed' to face misery after misery without chance to thrive. Plus, the suffering is too contrived and more like the suffering is for the sake of suffering.
          
          Sorry for the rant. Hope will be any change or alt story where there's no betrayal etc. thank you.

Red_Crayfish100

@metorokignto145678 Yeah, but to be fair, all of the torture is too contrived and came in a sudden. 
            
            And wondering the lack of FMC suffering from the same betrayal. Seems like too biased to one gender, despite we know that betrayal can be happened in both gender.
            
            Plus, I hope that BEP fic will be end with redemption for the women who left MC, and of course after their punishment. And reconciliation.
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metorokignto145678

@ Red_Crayfish100  thanks for your message, i know that most of my stories, the MC Is suffering, but in this fanfic, li-hab will be rewarded, dont worry
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metorokignto145678

Futuros proyectos
          - una nueva historia de KNT
          - La continuación de la historia "el hijo" 
          - una nueva historia de ratatatat74
          - una de MHA en donde habrá celos y obsesión
          - una nueva sección en donde publicaré mis dibujos, todo relacionado a ratatatat74

48angel105

@ metorokignto145678  oye puede hacer una de: Contrato, Reverse y Motherly, del artista Laliberte
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metorokignto145678

@ metorokignto145678  im considering it
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Red_Crayfish100

@metorokignto145678 Did you accept reverse NTR and Netori? The former is the traitor is male going after another girl while the latter it is MMC stealing another.
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metorokignto145678

ATENCIÓN!
          En bad ending party, tendrá un aftermath, como sabrán, li-han fue traicionado tres veces, Rei, Ashe y una chica de cabello naranja el cual no quiero saber su nombre, el cual, después de esas tres traiciones, el alto consejo de magia, al notar que la raza humana se está extinguiendo y creyendo que son inútiles, autoriza una ley para cazarlos

Red_Crayfish100

@Mokreamer in very contrived manner, ngl. It just like the author make it for the sake of suffering. 
            
            Wonder why he is always been betrayed and make all of the girls are wicked from the heart.
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Mokreamer

@metorokignto145678 Damn, Lihan gotta suffer a third time for character development.
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Mokreamer

@metorokignto145678 bro where does this Rin betraying Lihan thing even come from, I've even seen it on the anti-ntr subreddit I be on with literally no proof. Rat hasn't posted any new Bad Ending Party stuff, and Rin never cheated on him, I don't know why dudes WANT Lihan to get betrayed for a third time this badly, like just leave it at that epilogue rat posted and that's it. I hope rat doesn't continue cause I know that disgusting bastard will just continue making Lihan suffer so like the epilogue is the best ending an ntr mc like Lihan can get, a possessive but sadistic girlfriend like Rin is in the epilogue who lowkey uses his trauma to manipulate and keep him to herself.
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ELproyitoomg

Nombre Pa
          
          Pura drama y desgracia que le pones en tus fics, estaría mejor si subieras unos fics así bien vainilla y esperanzador.

metorokignto145678

@ELproyitoomg de hecho, tengo uno planeado, Invincible con Mr Marathon del reciente capítulo de The boys
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