@niaoreos its super cute! I love how you put visualizations! I'm not sure if you wanted tips or anything but I will just leave this here anyway. When you're writing one on one dialogue it could be helpful to throw in something like "----- said" every once in a while, to avoid any confusion. this can work with group conversations as well. either way, it is just fine! Aside from that, the work is very very nice, and I love what you've done so far!