@Mister-M137 Looks good. I left a comment there. I did notice you kind of repeated one part: Misaka swallowed hard, the weight of Ayla’s sharp observation pressing against her chest like a physical force. She wanted to argue, to deflect, to insist that she was doing the right thing.
And then: Misaka swallowed hard, the weight of Ayla’s sharp observation pressing against her chest like a physical force. She wanted to argue, to deflect, to insist that she was doing the right thing—but the words refused to come. They piled up uselessly in her throat, heavy and unformed.