@ Chell-P Well it's good enough so far, your OC might be a bit to much the "Mary-sue" right now but that might just be cause she is "human" right now. Although I hope to find out more about her/their backstory soon cause it seems interesting. She also mofht be a bit annoying modern day girl at times but other than that she's a great OC I think. I like the chapters you have done all yourself although the moments in them can seem a bit fasst, like "you" just want them to be written already. But I like the little snip of backstory so far and how you have portrayed the other characters good and in character whit their original from the show.
