@souveraine
Thanks so much for the follow and for voting on The Human Condition, Séverine! Nice to see you around again :)
Thanks for your message :-)
The Human Condition is great, I loved reading it - thanks for writing it :-)
Thank you thank you thank you for your final thoughts on Fallout. I was in another state for a wedding, and I was a groomsman so I was so busy! I did read everything you wrote though, and I made notes on things to change.
THIS is why I use Wattpad. It's so damn hard to see some of these problems while writing... especially in a story when character motivations are so complex.
I definitely want Mia to be more sympathetic right when Ava starts to go crazy... so I'm going to explain that Mia has promised herself to never leave her sister's side again. This will give her honorable intentions, explain some of her actions in part one, and hopefully pay off in the end.
I'm also going to make Jeff a little LESS sympathetic... and I'll clarify that Ava doesn't actually know what's going to happen to him when she "asks" the house to take him. Hopefully that will help people get into part two a little easier without hating a main protagonist.
I'm also going to explain the boobytrap in Trevor's garage a little better so people understand the implications when he sends Dean a text at the very end.
Let me know if you think of anything else that bothered you! I want to fix all the confusing bits so I can get a 5-star rating from you ; )
Your name is already in the acknowledgments! I'll let you know when it's all finalized and I'll send you an ebook : )
@JakeVanderArk And yes, Fallout Dreams will get a great rating from me :-) I have to say that commenting a book while I read it is something I don't normally do, and that I have had a lot of problems with Wattpad lately, which doesn't work well on my phone anymore. But I'm happy you found my comments useful :-) Don't hesitate to ask when you need someone to read and comment, I'm so flattered I'm able to somehow contribute to the books of a talented writer like you!
@JakeVanderArk Well, I jut re-read the epilogue and you DID explain the boobytrap. I'm not sure why I didn't understand it the first time - a combination of being very tired since I was reading in the middle of the night and of English not being my native language maybe? Sorry, I feel stupid now...
Yessssss, I was hoping you'd see the new book! Thanks so much for the add, souveraine! I'm looking forward to your thoughts!
Don't be sorry!!! You can read it any time : )
I actually just received the test copy today and I'm super excited. I'm waiting on feedback from a couple more people and hoping to publish next week.
I'm really nervous though... I feel like I'm losing readers about halfway through and I don't know what to do : ( Not a single comment on the last chapter so far. This should have been SO much easier to read than Purple, but I had at least a few people make it to the end of that one!
But doubt is normal........ right?
Thank you so much for the kind words. As you know, engaging with people who read my crap is the only reason I keep going. Seriously... you've always been encouraging and I appreciate it so much.
If you get around to reading, that would be cool. If not, absolutely no worries. Just glad to have such a kind person around for support : )
Hope life is treating you well, Souveraine!
@JakeVanderArk I'm so sorry, Jake, I haven't been on Wattpad for a while. I saw that you published a new book, and I'm really looking forward to reading it, but unfortunately I haven't gotten started yet. I'm so flattered a real literary talent like you would like to know my thoughts, and I'm so sorry I didn't respond to your message or commented when you wanted me to. When are you planning on publishing the paperback, when do you need feedbacks? I'm sure the book is brilliant anyway - you've never disappointed so far, quite the opposite, you always manage to surprise and impress me with your unique talent to describe complex human emotions with your own special writing style and to never ever write what is expected. I'll start reading soon, I've been so looking forward to a new book from you and I'm so excited that it's finally there!!!
Thanks so much for voting on Minnesota Goodbyes, Séverine! Glad you're enjoying it so far :)
HEY THANK YOU SO SO SO MUCH FOR 'PLANNING TO READ' MY NEW BOOK INTERNETSHIP!! It really means a lot, it really does :)
Hi, thanks for adding my works , much appreciated.
Hey, thanks for the add! I hope you enjoy the story.
@RainWhisker Yes, very sad story, but very good book! :-)
@Natalie_Martin I enjoy reading it. Thank you :-)
Thank you for your votes on Heart Shaped Bruise :)