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Review #36: @piana_staric

reviewed author: piana_staric
book title: Supermarket is a Cupid
reviewer: dreaminginreverie

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cover + title:
the cover is simple, but very pretty! i also really like the title! it makes sense and it's very intriguing!

description:
the description is good, but there's a few misspellings and you missed a question mark after the "secrets get revealed" sentence. concerning the questions. . .i feel there's too many. questions always rub me wrong because once i read them i feel like i know how the story is going to end. maybe try to combine three into one.

writing style:
i like it! but it isn't original and you don't add anything to make it original. maybe get headers made for your chapters or add their location.

characters:

Nyla -
she's very relatable, but i also feel like she's too. . .nerdy or self-conscious you might say. she berates herself about everything but at the end she ends up saying or doing what she said she wouldn't. she seems like a good character, but i would put a bit more thought into her.

Jake -
i haven't seen much of him but from the one scene he was in. . .he seems dangerous and kind of an ass.

grammar:
this needs help. you have a lot of missing words, misspelled words, incorrect tenses, plus a few other things that take away from the enjoyment of the story. i'd look into hiring an editor.

overall thoughts:
i think it's a good plot that just hasn't lived up to its potential yet. fixing the things i mentioned will make it even better and give it more potential! thank you for choosing me as your reviewer!