Book Reviews (Requests closed)

'Valence' by Aarya2103

The cover

NEVER CHANGE THIS COVER! It is so good. I absolutely love this one. The title is clearly readable and almost seems to light up., I actually get the feeling that I'm looking at a girl in front of a mirror without an actual mirror being on the cover and the quote at the bottom is brilliant.

Very well done, if you made that cover yourself then be proud cause I know a few people who could take some notes from you

The title

Simple, clean and makes sense along with the story. Like a title should be

The description

There are many details in here that are also mentioned in the first few chapters. When things get revealed during the start of the story it isn't really necessary to put them in the description as well. 

All a description needs to be is short, powerful and convincing enough to make me want to read it.

It's not bad, don't get me wrong. It's not too long and it does make me want to read it but some details could have been left out. But that's just my opinion so don't worry about it too much :)

The story

The way you describe Brielle's sadness is beautiful. I've lost many family members over the years so I know the immense sadness that comes with it. The way you describe it is spot on. That is exactly what that kind of sadness feels like and I imagine it being 10x worse when its a parent.

I love how you make a header for all your chapters and give them all a name. That's a nice little detail

Why Brielle allowed him to guide her to a car only moments after he has grabbed her, silenced her and just acted like a crazy stalker is a bit weird to me but it works in this story. Maybe subconsciously she felt like she could trust him after all? 

The chapters aren't too long or too short which I appreciate and the story is very well written.

I also like the pace of this story as nothing feels all that rushed and you take time elaborating on the important details. 

I have only read all the edited parts since you are editing the entire story and what I read so far is really good.

I noticed that you tend to post author notes at the end of every chapter. All though I do like reading them at times (especially since I have inner conversations with myself as well and love knowing that more people have that as well) it isn't necessary to post them at the end of every single chapter. Sometimes this will disrupt the flow of a story for me.

My final judgement

This story is very good. The only pointers I had were about the description and author notes but that is purely a personal preference and opinion. Everything else was actually very good and enjoyable.

I liked what I read so far and will keep it in my library. Once its fully edited I'd love to read the rest of it.

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Heyy Aarya2103! Hope you liked my review of your story. Thank you for requesting it as this was the first story in years that I've written a review of.