Judge Username: apickypisces
Writer Username: KJPotterhead
Title: The Fifth Marauder – James Potter's Twin Sister
Topic: Marauders Era
Grammar/Spelling: 7/10
Title: 4/5
Intro/Description: 8/10
Characters: 9/10
Character Development: 8/10
Plan: 8/10
Creativity/Originality: 7/10
Writing Style: 7/10
Rules: 5/5
Total: 63/80
(Message from Judge)
My main feedback is to cater your book to the readers a bit more! Think about what you like to read and how those authors pay attention to grammar and the layout of their writing. Spacing between dialogue makes it easier to follow and also allows readers to comment on the dialogues their comment applies to more readily. As far as grammar, I would recommend focusing on proper spacing and comma placement. I love the idea of your story and your opening dialogue was very engaging! Emily seems a lot like James from the get-go, so perhaps, to better characterize her, it could be worth focusing on how they may be different as well. It may be easier to accomplish this by changing from a first-person point of view to a third-person point of view, though that is not necessary by any means.
Overall, GOOD JOB! :) It's a lovely book and I can't wait to see where it goes.
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