AN: Fangz(Thanks.) 2(To) bloodytearz666 4(For) helpin(helping ) me wif (with) da(the) chapta(chapter)! BTW (By the way) preps stop flaming(You can light this fanfiction on fire? PREPS, TELL ME YOUR SECRET!) ma(my) story ok! (Wow only five words spelt correctly! And that's including Raven's username)
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The next day I woke up in my bedroom. It was snowing and raining(Again. SLEET) again. I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle I had. My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends.(Can you not just stay in there?) I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun.(NO-ONE CARES WHAT YOU'RE WEARING.)
My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis(This) is u!(You)) woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner.) (I DON'T CARE.)
“OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!” she said excitedly.(Who gives a crappadoodle?)
“Yeah? So?” I said, blushing.(SHE CAN BLUSH? WOW.)
“Do you like Draco?” she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall.(How is that even possible? The Slytherin common room is practically a million miles away from the Great Hall!)
“No I so fucking don’t!” I shouted. (Riiiiight...)
“Yeah right(See? Even she can see) !” she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me.
“Hi.” he said.
“Hi.” I replied flirtily.(You were blushing earlier...)
“Guess what.” he said.
“What?” I asked.
“Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade.” he told me.(When was Good Charlotte a wizard band?)
“Oh. My. Fucking. God!” I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR.(YES WE GET IT! YOU LOVE MCR!)
“Well…. do you want to go with me?” he asked.( SOMEONE WANTS TO GO OUT WITH YOU???)
I gasped.(See? She's shocked too)
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My Immortal by XXXbloodyrists666XXX. My Commentary.
HumorMy Immortal is a Harry Potter fanfiction, famous for being the WORST fanfiction ever. It was originally by Tara Gilesbie AKA XXXbloodyrists666XXX on Fanfiction.net. Tara wrote it with the help of her friend, 'Raven'(That's just her cover name for he...
